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 Disc 2/target 1 kindly review 
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Post Disc 2/target 1 kindly review
I am submitting my target 1 of Disc 2 for review please
Thanks very much for your comments

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Mon May 25, 2015 9:09 pm
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Post Re: Disc 2/target 1 kindly review
Hi Paul, a few things to address at this time:

First, it appears you were off to a good start, as your S3 freehand sketch is great (if I remember correctly, this is the Hajj ceremony target). However, I do see one archetype present that was not labelled and explored. Beyond this point it appears AOL-drive set its teeth in.

Broadly speaking, I see little coherence between your S2 [aspect] dimension descriptors and their accompanying analytical sketches. Be certain not to engage in any 'artistic liberties' here. Sometimes less (more basic) is more, bearing in mind that we are only seeking to create a diagram with the site template, not a fully rendered drawing.

Regarding S4 explorations, it is time to branch out a little, as it appears you are working in a fairly strict left-to-right pattern which can and will impede the natural progression into higher-level data coming through.

Also, of brief note, I do not see a header for S2 [x]. And finally, please try to re-size the pages to an equal and easily readable size in the future, as it makes reviewing structure much easier. Anyhow, hope that helps.

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Fri Jun 05, 2015 6:09 am
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Post Re: Disc 2/target 1 kindly review
Noted.Thank you for your valuable time. appreciated
regards
Paul


Mon Jun 08, 2015 10:58 am
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