I added in the suggestions from an earlier post feedback. I also scanned the results of my red pen error checking after the target was revealed. Summary is at the bottom. Feedback and comments are much appreciated.
Summary There are human elements with movement at the site. Things, objects and something with structure that is useful and related to aerospace is present. There is something big and vast at the site. There is darkness here in a place that is fantastic. There are interactions of darkness, usefulness, human at a place. There analogies of ‘beings’, ‘factory’ and ‘yard sale’. I feel normal and interested while others feel intelligent, bewildered and overwhelmed. At the target there is an object at a place that has a void and darkness. There is a human here with movement. There is an analogy of ‘beings’ and others feel intelligent. Analysis P1.) A person in a space shuttle P2.) Someone at an airplane factory P3.) A place where machines are made and people are about
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